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The Circus Dragon's avatar

WELL THAT WAS MESSED UP BUT IT'S A GOOD CHANGE FROM DRAGONS-DYING-MESSED UP

Tamsin G.'s avatar

🤣🤣 I love that dragons are in higher threshhold of sad for you than humans.

The Circus Dragon's avatar

BWAHAHAHHAHA

Sorry not sorry 🤣🤣

Tamsin G.'s avatar

Well I mean if your dragons are what most dragons are like then I would feel the same.

The Circus Dragon's avatar

Heehee xD you hear that, Deleiri? Compliments.

Deleiri: Compliments and cookies 😌😌😌 I'm so well cared for this month.

Tamsin G.'s avatar

🫶 so deserved.

Jonah Raye Anthony's avatar

Whoa! I was not expecting that twist! Masterfully done, Tamsin!

Also, I loved the building up of tension through most of the story! Gave it such a mysterious, unsettling edge!

Tamsin G.'s avatar

🤣 part of that was running out of room in my word count. But thank you so much!!

Stories Sown With Hope's avatar

Unexpected ending!

The price you pay for stepping off the path is irreversible.

Yikes!

Stories Sown With Hope's avatar

What a sad circular story. A Groundhog’s Day type repetition that will never end.

Edward.Marlo.Ruiz's avatar

This was a great read. But I honestly felt a little more horrified at the events unfolding. Like shit got REAL. But the end was sad nonetheless. Dope work

Leanne Shawler's avatar

Ooh, a recursive loop! Well played!

Tamsin G.'s avatar

Ohh thank you so much!! I thought it would be fun. 😁

KJ Harlow's avatar

OK I've read both and this one is sadder, 1st prize

GrousyGirl's avatar

A price for immortality indeed!

Tamsin G.'s avatar

Such a horrible price.

Hazel's avatar

A great story, very captivating but for sad? For me, only 😭😭 out of 😭😭😭😭😭.

Tamsin G.'s avatar

That just means I need to write more 🤣.

Hazel's avatar

Intriguing logic, let's see how it plays out 😂😂

Tamsin G.'s avatar

🤣 Growth mind set, it's a great way to handle failure.

Verdant Butterfly's avatar

so, I haz Soo many questions? *blink* *blink* why come they didn't stay on the parh? they had like one rule? ...how hard is it to follow one rule?

Tamsin G.'s avatar

Some people aren't very good at following rules 🤷

Verdant Butterfly's avatar

i mean a request followed by or you're grounded usually gets the request done...a request followed by or you'll die and im thinking middle of the path head down walk forward don't leave the path ....just me?

Tamsin G.'s avatar

Lol your smarter than most people though 😂.

I had better reasons for them to die but I only had so much words. 🤣

LM Sypher's avatar

Fantastic story, Tamsin! I really enjoyed the read!